Since “Hall” is the name of a person, it should be capitalized. The revision has been made throughout the paper for consistency.
Better sentence construction for readability.
[Explanation3]: Academic language:
“In addition” is a formal word choice widely used in academic writing.
In academic writing, contractions are discouraged.
[Explanation5]: Word choice:
The incorrect word choice has been corrected.
In the passive voice, adverbs of manner are generally placed between the helping and main verbs or after the verb phrase.
[Explanation7]: Typographical error:
In American English, the relative pronoun “that” is used to introduce restrictive clauses.
[Explanation9]: Language enhancement:
Redundant phrases make a sentence wordy. Being economical in writing enhances clarity of meaning and readability of the sentence.
The singular count noun “graphene” requires a singular verb, and hence the revision.
In a list starting with "such as" or "including," the use of "etc" and "and so on" is redundant
[Explanation1]: Flow & Clarity of information/content:
Content has been shifted here improve clarity and make a strong introduction.
[Explanation2]: Flow & transition:
For fluent readability and coherence, a transition word has been added here.
[Explanation3]: Language enhancement:
This change has been made to eliminate redundancy and economical expression.
The singular count noun “structure” requires a determiner; hence, the indefinite article has been added.
[Explanation5]: Academic tone + Language enhancement:
The word “unlikely” has been used instead of “there are very few chances” for a formal tone. Formal language is a hallmark of academic English.
[Explanation6]: Sentence reconstruction:
Change in syntax for clarity and readability.
[Explanation7]: Subject-related technical enhancement:
This clause has been revised for clarity in technical content.
Since specific edge states are being referred here, the definite article is necessary.
[Explanation9]: Language correctness:
The words “also” and “in addition” convey the same meaning; hence, using both the words in this context makes the sentence redundant.